Class 9

Journal:

What were the suggestions made on your paper you received through the peer review process that you incorporated into your paper? Be specific and include your impressions of your experience of writing the revision memo.

 

Agenda:

Journal

Hand in paper / packet –

should include final paper, revision memo, packet, drafts, review of quality of feedback.

    This is a process, not a product.

        "Start your vacation as soon as you know you can go"

    It is the experience, not the outcome.

The process: Instructions, Actions, & Reflection

*********Following complex instructions************

The revision memo

The role of mastery writing – make it count for you.

Secondary Sources

Get "Song at Sunset" for next Wednesday, Feb 20, 2008

**********Annotation************************

Qualities of oral reading

Song at Sunset

 

 

 
 

 

Scale for Fluency
1

The student reads single words in isolation from one another. There is no "flow" in the student's reading. Words are read telegraphically. The student demonstrates only word-by-word reading.

2

The student reads with two to three word phrasing. Reading is very hesitant. The student displays considerable pausing and drawn out blending and attempts to decode the words. Reading is more of word calling than fluent, comprehensive reading.

3

The student pauses for ending punctuation. Inflection changes may not be present as the student reads from sentence to sentence. The student reads in phrases but misses the tone considered necessary in fluent understandable reading.

4

Most of the time, the student has appropriate reading, "flow" and phrasing. This prosody score also indicates attention to punctuation with pauses and appropriate inflection.

5

Performance is characterized by reading that generally "flows." The student's voice changes to reflect meaning changes in the passage. Ending inflections are consistently appropriate. Reading is fluent and smooth, generally easy to listen to and understood.

 

Adapted from Table 1. from Marston, Mansfield, cited in (pg. 81 Heineman, in Fountas and Pinnell, 1996) by Dubbels (2003)

 

Definitions of

 

literal on the Web:

• actual: being or reflecting the essential or genuine character of something; "her actual motive"; "a literal solitude like a desert"- G.K.Chesterton; "a genuine dilemma"
  
• without interpretation or embellishment; "a literal depiction of the scene before him"
  
• limited to the explicit meaning of a word or text; "a literal translation"
  
• avoiding embellishment or exaggeration (used for emphasis); "it's the literal truth"
  
• misprint: a mistake in printed matter resulting from mechanical failures of some kind
  wordnet.princeton.edu/perl/webwn
  

figurative on the Web:

• (used of the meanings of words or text) not literal; using figures of speech; "figurative language"
  
• figural: consisting of or forming human or animal figures; "a figural design"; "the figurative art of the humanistic tradition"- Herbert Read
  wordnet.princeton.edu/perl/webwn
  
• Figurative art describes artworks - particularly paintings - which are clearly derived from real object sources, but are not necessarily representational.
  en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Figurative
  
• art that represents a human, animal or object's form by means of a symbol or figure.
  www.worldimages.com/art_glossary.php
  
• Describes art that represents the human form through the depiction of a figure, SYMBOL, or likeness.
  www.artsmia.org/art_in_america/glossary.html
  

 

Name ______________________________ Date _____________ Teacher ______________________

Assignment or Title: __________________________________________________________________

Trait	5	3	1	Comments
Ideas and Content (Understanding of the materials is assessed here)	Writing is clear and specific. Depending on the type of writing, either specific and interesting details are provided, or appropriate and insightful support is taken from the texts.	Although writing is less clear, the reader can see what the writer is trying to say. Details may be less appropriate, specific, or insightful.	The reader has a hard time figuring out what the writer means. Or else, the writer does not yet have much to say about this topic.
Organizational	The organization enhances and showcases the central idea or theme. The order, structure, or presentation is compelling and moves the reader through the text.	The organizational structure is strong enough to move the reader from point to point without undue confusion	The writing lacks a clear sense of direction, ideas, details or events seem strung together in a random, haphazard fashion-or else there is no identifiable internal structure at all. More than one of the following problems is likely to be evident.
Voice	The writer speaks directly to the reader in a way that is appropriate to the type of writing; individualistic, expressive, & engaging. Clearly, the writer is involved in the text and is writing to be read.	The writer seems sincere, but not genuinely engaged, committed, or involved. The result is pleasant and sometimes even personable, but short of compelling. May not be appropriate for the type of writing.	The writer seems indifferent, uninvolved or inappropriately distanced from the topic and/or the audience. The writing seems flat, lifeless or mechanical; depending on the topic, it may be overly technical or jargonistic.
Word Choice	Words convey the intended message in an interesting, precise and natural way. The writing is full and rich, yet concise.	The language is functional, even if it lacks punch; it does get the message across.	The writer struggles with a limited vocabulary, searching for words to convey meaning
Sentence Fluency	The writing has an easy flow & rhythm when read aloud. Sentences are well built, with consistently strong and varied structure that makes expressive oral reading easy & enjoyable.	The text hums along efficiently for the most part, though it may lack a certain rhythm or grace. It tends to be more pleasant or businesslike than musical, more mechanical than fluid.	The paper is difficult to follow or to read aloud. Sentences tend to be choppy, incomplete, rambling irregular, or just very awkward.
Conventions	Even careful reading reveals no glaring errors. The conventions are used so well that they make it easier to read the paper.	The reader notices some mistakes. They are a little bothersome, but they do not slow the reader down too much.	Mistakes really get in the way of understanding the writing. The reader has to read once to "decode", and then again to get all the meaning.